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In this world, in the silence.
The galaxy of stars surrounds us.
Where my soul goes, it leaves behind vessels of love.
Breaking the silence my laughter is the only noise.
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Silence is at the heart of man.
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Very intriguing poem, it's a very interesting connection. I like how it starts with the world, then to the galaxy, but I feel as if you skipped something between the second and third line. Maybe elaboration would help. I also think since you started with silence, you could end it with noise. I think it would be cool. It would show transition and change. I love the phrase "vessels of love" I find it interesting and different. I love the title, but you spelled it wrong, unless you're talking about a Canadian band. I think you meant "delirium". Hope I helped!
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~scribblingnooly Jan 12, 2012  Professional
I love the briefness of it, encapsulating a profound sentiment in few words.
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!AnimailianKin Aug 26, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
whys it so short?
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*WolfDreams Aug 26, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
writers block >>
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!AnimailianKin Aug 27, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
oh
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